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Title: Together
Author: opalmatrix
Warnings: Swearing, dubcon, explicit consensual m/m sex
Rating: NC-17 - not worksafe
Pairing(s): 585
Prompt: Hakkai/Gojyo - fatigue and sleeping in close quarters, unexpected first-time sex, with witnesses
Spoilers: Reload "Snowdrop" arc
Word count: 3565
Notes: Written for Saiyuki Kink Meme IV. Beta by the ever-patient and supportive smillaraaq.
Summary: Hakkai discovers that two can sleep much more warmly than one.

The wind blew the light, dry snow into a constantly shifting veil across Hakkai's tired eyes ... Collapse )

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erinmacha
Nov. 25th, 2009 02:52 am (UTC)
Oh - so lovely. I got caught up in the middle of it. (Wait, what...RL still goes on?)

Over all smooth flow. There were choppy bits, but the choppy bits were exactly where they needed to be to help feel what the character(s) was feeling. :) Fantastic!

All characters were in character. :D I like how Sanzo figured out how to get the explanation to Goku – without having to do it himself AND a bit of revenge for being woken up!

Outside environment (cold, snow, fire) was described well - not so much detail it became distracting, but set the scene perfectly.

Um...all that said, well done! AND!!!! THANK YOU!
opalmatrix
Nov. 30th, 2009 02:04 am (UTC)

Ohhh, thanks for the lovely compliment (especially about getting so caught up in the story)!

I can really sympathize with Sanzo some days - this trip is very hard on him.

pfmoi
Nov. 25th, 2009 05:51 am (UTC)
lmao, evil Sanzo for the win!
opalmatrix
Nov. 30th, 2009 02:06 am (UTC)

It's tough being Mr. Introvert Sanzo, stuck in a small car - and small hotel rooms - and small caves - with three other people all the time!

Thanks for reading!

clytemnaestra
Nov. 25th, 2009 10:37 pm (UTC)
Mmmmmmmm, yummy :)
opalmatrix
Nov. 30th, 2009 03:12 am (UTC)

Oooooh, thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

avierra
Nov. 26th, 2009 12:12 am (UTC)
Hehe! This was delicious. I really like the setting-- I know I felt pretty darned cold while reading it. I also like the domestic thing that's the trademark of Hakkai and Gojyo's relationship: The snuggling, the warmth, the comfort in each other's company.

And like everyone else, I loved the evil Sanzo at the end. I would love to be a fly on the wall for that conversation :D
opalmatrix
Nov. 30th, 2009 03:17 am (UTC)

I'm so happy you liked this!

Yes, the cold vs. warmth thing was something that once I started actually typing, I worked on pretty consciously. "Warm" is definitely on of my top adjectives for Gojyo. smilla had to pull me up a couple of times and point out where I'd become a little repetitious in how I was doing it, though!

Gojyo and Hakkai are my guys, but I do love me some Sanzo sometimes!

karuune
Dec. 1st, 2009 03:15 pm (UTC)
That was so funny, and so sexy, and so sweet.
opalmatrix
Dec. 26th, 2009 02:32 am (UTC)
"Together"

Yikes, I fell down the Yuletide rabbit-hole and never answered this ... I'm so glad you enjoyed this!

turquoise_woman
Dec. 27th, 2009 04:30 am (UTC)
That was funny, hot, cracky, cute, really HOT smutty wonderfullness.

I'm just getting back into reading fanfic. What a great thing to read, too! I love your writing!

(That it's my OTP doesn't hurt, either! ;-)
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